UCS1001 MEC Assignment #1: Reflections (in a learning portfolio)
Draft 1
Hi all, my name is Goh Bin Hong, I am a self-motivated and cheerful individual, I always have been keen to up-skill myself by learning new things whenever I get a chance. My personal strengths are I am good at communicating, have leadership skills, am a team player and I am an adaptive person. These traits are just a few examples of the traits that I have. I am currently a university undergraduate, in Singapore Institute of Technology, majoring in Mechanical Engineering. Prior to university I was in the military under the 35th Combat Engineer Battalion, during my time there I was a Platoon Commander and an Officer/Specialist Cadet instructor, my time there was nothing short but fruitful. I was studying in Aeronautical Engineering in Singapore Polytechnic and at the same time was also the captain of the weightlifting team in the school. During my free time I would normally go to the gym to get some training in, or I would love to go around Singapore to find hole in the walls restaurants and cafe to sift out the best places to eat and drink! Throughout the three years in SIT, my goal is to make the most of my time here and meet new people as well.
Draft 2, 7 September 2022
Dear Professor Brad and classmates, I am writing this introductory letter to let you know me better. Currently, I am an undergraduate at the Singapore Institute of Technology, with a Bachelor of Engineering, in Mechanical Engineering. Before enrolling in the University, I was in the Singapore Arm Forces serving my national service. I was a Platoon Commander and trainer in the 35th Singapore Combat Engineer Battalion. I handled water-based operations for the army and at the same time had the opportunity to instill essential technical and leadership skills to the cadets. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic in 2019, with a Diploma in Aeronautical Engineering and a Diploma in Aviation Management. The reason that I switched from majoring in Aeronautical Engineering to Mechanical Engineering was due to the Corona Virus in 2019. The virus had affected the aviation industry tremendously and this prompted me to make a switch in my field as majoring in mechanical engineering offers a wider variety of jobs. One hobby which I love and have been doing for the past 10 years is weightlifting/powerlifting. I was a chubby kid in the past, and weightlifting/powerlifting has helped me to build a better body, be healthier and instill more confidence in myself. I was fortunate enough to be selected to represent Singapore at the Asia-Oceanic Championships back in 2017. Unfortunately, I was unable to go due to my final examinations. One of the strengths I possess is being an active listener. I pay close attention to what other people are saying. I am always interested in people’s opinions on a certain topic when they are talking about it. I feel that being an active listener helps facilitate effective communication while simultaneously allowing me to show respect to the speaker and help foster a better relationship with the speaker. One of the weaknesses that I have is my grammar and presentation skills. Often times I would let my tongue slip and speak Singlish. This causes me to stop my train of thought and it leaves an awkward pause in the middle of the presentation. Additionally, I am weak in my grammar and it is most prominent when I am either doing my essays or doing a presentation. From this module, two goals that I have in mind are, to improve my effective communication skills and to refine my grammar skills. Throughout this module I want to improve my communication and writing skills, this is to further improve myself as an individual and to be more professional in the future when I am working. I hope this brief introduction letter has helped you to get a better understanding of myself. Sincerely, Bin Hong
Draft 3, 12 September 2022
Dear Professor Brad and classmates, I am writing this introductory letter to let you know me better. Currently, I am an undergraduate at the Singapore Institute of Technology, with a bachelor of engineering, in mechanical engineering. Before enrolling in the university, I was in the Singapore Arm Forces serving my national service. I was a platoon commander and trainer in the 35th Singapore Combat Engineer Battalion. I handled water-based operations for the army and at the same time had the opportunity to instil essential technical and leadership skills to the cadets. I graduated from Singapore Polytechnic in 2019, with a diploma in aeronautical engineering and a diploma in aviation management. The reason that I switched from majoring in aeronautical engineering to mechanical engineering was due to the Corona Virus in 2019. The virus had affected the aviation industry tremendously and this prompted me to make a switch in my field as majoring in mechanical engineering offers a wider variety of jobs. One hobby which I love and have been doing for the past 10 years is weightlifting/powerlifting. I was a chubby kid in the past, and weightlifting/powerlifting has helped me to build a better body, be healthier and instil more confidence in myself. I was fortunate enough to be selected to represent Singapore at the Asia-Oceanic Championships back in 2017. Unfortunately, I was unable to go due to my final examinations. One of the strengths I possess is being an active listener. I pay close attention to what other people are saying. I am always interested in people’s opinions on a particular topic when they are talking about it. I feel that being an active listener helps facilitate effective communication while simultaneously allowing me to show respect to the speaker and help foster a better relationship with the speaker. One of the weaknesses that I have is my grammar and presentation skills. Often times I would let my tongue slip and speak Singlish. This causes me to stop my train of thought and it leaves an awkward pause in the middle of the presentation. Additionally, I am weak in my grammar and it is most prominent when I am either doing my essays or doing a presentation. From this module, two goals that I have in mind are, to improve my effective communication skills and to refine my grammar skills. Throughout this module I want to improve my communication and writing skills, this is to further improve myself as an individual and to be more professional in the future when I am working. I hope this brief introduction letter has helped you to get a better understanding of myself. Sincerely, Bin Hong
Blog's that I have read and commented
- Wei en
- jing Zhe
- Zong Xiang
Thanks, Bin Hong, for being one of the first to create your blog and to post! (Consider this a first draft of your letter. It will need to be more formal than this. Please look at the examples in Unit 2.)
ReplyDeleteHi Prof Brad,
DeleteI apologize for the late reply, I was having issue with the mac version of Blogspot. I will follow your lead and change it accordingly.
Thank You,
Bin Hong
Hi Bin Hong,
ReplyDeleteAfter looking at your post on self-introduction, I am admire by you able to get selected for oversea competetion, as a judo athletic myslef I know that there's only minimal chance to get selected and funded as Singapore does not really invested much on sports.
Your letter is very clear and descriptive, I is something I wanted to learn from. However there are some minnior changes you might need to change,which is the use of capitalization in the first paragraph.
Hope you have a happy Sunday.
Weien
Hi Bin Hong,
ReplyDeleteYour letter is very interesting and organize. I could not find any changes that needs to be made. Hope to get to know you better.
Jing Zhe
Hi Jingzhe, Thank you for taking the time to read my introduction. I have also read your introduction as well, I find it very refreshing and interesting as you talked about MBTI personality.
DeleteDear Bin Hong,
ReplyDeleteThank you for this clear, concise and yet well substantiated letter with the personal sharing. I appreciate the content that is well aligned with the assignment brief, the effective organization and the generally flawless language use. You've done a very fine job providing supporting information for each specific content area, allowing us readers to gain a clearer understanding of who you are.
From the discussion of your background and your NS experience, it's easy to see that you have great potential for demonstrating and further developing leadership in our module. In terms of challenges, it's clear you can be motivated to work more on the the presentation portion of our module.
As writing is one of your goals as well, please allow me to point out one language issue:
--- Throughout this module I want to improve my communication and writing skills, this is to further improve myself as an individual and to be more professional in the future when I am working. > (comma splice)
I look forward to working with you further this term.
Cheers,
Brad
Hi Prof Brad,
DeleteThank you for taking the time to read my introduction letter! I am humbled by your comments. In addition, I appreciate the comment that you gave me on the comma splice, I will try my best to improve my skill set for this module and the English language overall. Lastly, I would like to thank you for being passionate when you are interacting with the class, as I find your class very refreshing compared to the other modules.
As always, I look forward to learn more from you!
Well Wishes,
Bin Hong